Hiya, this is really good too ali! Beautifully written, i love the colors at the beginning!
Cya =)



*WG

beautifully written but the way you put in spider's silk making up her gown sounds evil, as spiders are almost always associated with evil. And I hate to say it but how can one bathe their face in a breeze? Water and air, different elements. "the stars were all her silver crown" isnt that from the book itself? Also, the Elves left Middle Earth to a land that was meant to be more beautiful than that they had lived on, so to say that she "danced away from mornings light
And now in darkness she will dwell
Stolen by the nights dark spell" is probably wrong. Also, the Elves more or less chose to leave, so to say she was stolen by the nights dark spell isnt.. well, isnt right. :( Sorry to give you such a harsh report (especially since I'm very bad at writing myself). Anyway, I think this poem sounds more like death to me, like Theravai who once brang joy and color to the world died and went to a "place no man can say". :) Anyhoo, I like the way it all rather fits together when you read it. All the last words ryme - such as dwell and spell and ground and sound. Very nice. (pay no attension to all the bad stuff)

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excellent rythm, sound, and voice with great discrption and depiction of the Tolkien-ish time. do more!

Very excellent. I agree with the previous comment. Once again, very good. I'd like to see more poetry like this in the near future.

It's melancolicly beautiful... so gentle and bitter sweet... I love it... Your really captured Tolkien's spirit...