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| IHJ 2003-08-03 ch 12,  | abuseAh...zee climax is over (thus making this chapter not suspenseful) and NOW we understand Trey's motives for the murders. So sad... I know I've been harping about this mucho times, but...Cherry! More Cherry! |
| BelovedMoon 2003-07-31 ch 11, | abuseWow that Trey is one sick...well you know. I hope Sammy and Cherry mess him up good! Can't wait to see what happens. |
| IHJ 2003-07-30 ch 11, | abuseAll right. I STILL don't understand the motive for killing Jonesy. Tom, I understand. It was to protect himself. But Jonesy? Out of pure hate? And at the end you said "Scott reached down toward us" when I think you meant to say "Trey" instead. Nice chapter. But I still hope Cherry's character will be a LITTLE more explored into the next chapter or so. |
| BelovedMoon 2003-07-29 ch 10, | abuseWow I didn't think it would be Trey! What a great chapter! Update soon, I must know what happens to Sammy! |
| IHJ 2003-07-27 ch 10, | abuseSo I'm guessing either she DIDN'T lock the stall door or it was weak enough for Trey to smash open. *smile* Good twist with him using "Sammy-girl". Now that we know who...I wanna know why! |
| IHJ 2003-07-24 ch 9, | abusePen...pen knife...Nice chapter but now you're confusing me with who's the real culprit! Jack? the "Sammy-girl"? Or Trey with his pen-knife? But that ain't really harmful... Cherry...you should write more about Cherry. She's just...THERE. A mystery, an enigma. |
| IHJ 2003-07-23 ch 8, | abuseWell, not entirely surprising Tom's dead. There was foreshadowing. Nice use of the times and chapters. But why would someone murder Tom? Hm... Looking forward to the updates! |
| BelovedMoon 2003-07-22 ch 8, | abuseThe plot thickens! This is so great! |
| Laura 2003-07-22 ch 8, anon. | abuseWow. great writing |
| BelovedMoon 2003-07-20 ch 7, | abuseHoly crap! So there *might* be a motive for murder now! Unless that's a convenient cover...oh! This is getting so interesting! |
| IHJ 2003-07-20 ch 7, | abuseYou are evil, you are evil, you are evil... *chanting* Leaving us on cliffhangers! Hm...Trey tripping and all...might be a bit suspicious... And if it leads to the roof...how far far the ground is the roof? Cherry's one to look for, too. *sigh* The wait for another chapter...you evil person. |
| Enter The Coil 2003-07-19 ch 6, | abuse((Review actually posted by shauna under Dragonlover's account)) I absolutely love this story, the way you wrote it and the way it all seems to flow, its amazing! keep up the great work, cant wait to read more! ~Shauna~ |
| Izzy J (can't sign in) 2003-07-19 ch 6, anon. | abuseYou're upping the odds. I mean, I thought it was Jack with with previous chapter having the person saying "Sammy-girl" but now with Tom panicking about where she was going... Could you include a bit more about Cherry (if you haven't written it out already, which I somewhat dbout) because she's a virtual stranger? |
| BelovedMoon 2003-07-18 ch 6, | abuseWhat a great chapter! I love how everyone's suspicious...nobody can be trusted. Keep up the good work, I love this! |
| Racing The Train 2003-07-18 ch 5, | abuseAhh! I'm left hanging at the end of every chapter. This one is the biggest cliffhanger of them all. I love it! Keep writing, I can't wait to see what happens next. |