"Behind the Muddled Mind"

hmm, somehow I managed to read chapter 3 first... wow, m'bad...or just odd. I think both. Anyway... "One Man's Mistake"? "Tendrils of Failure"? hehe, where'd that one come from? O! "Aftershocks of a Fatal Mistake" um, "Aftershocks of Failure?" Not sure where this is going at the moment, so that's all I have. -kezkay

O, a mystery indeed. Well, let's see...a title...hm... maybe "Folly" or um, O i dunno! Gee, I'm gonna read the next chapter before I sound like a total idiot. -Kez

Off to a slow start, but very interesting. Brent reminds me a little of Galahad. I want to know what happens.

oh...hey this is a marvellous start to something good ^_^. Sounds like a master trying to train an apprentice who is always failing...or something. I especially like how you captured the mood and scene-play with words. I could see this playing in my head like a movie and it was funny...in a serious kind of way...if that made sense.@_@

anyways, kudos! and keep writing! ^__^

Well, t will probably be good, but right now it is a bit empty, work on it... a lot

You should write a bit more, and then I would love to help you title it. But this is a great start!