Oh wow. That was beautiful..I loved it..so lost and longing...railing at the precious thing you can never reach..I loved it

hmm...interesting. a sad story indeed but beautifully told. i wonder about the melody and hope it adds to the song. thank you for the review. i'm afraid i don't quite have much taste for the kind of things you write but that does not mean that they are not good. this piece was fantastic and i can only assume this of the others. keep up the great work and may God bless you.

Hm, I think this is your best one, I love it.

Hey. I read ur profile, and you're a really interesting person from what I read. I got ur name after u reviewed my poem You Make Me Remember. Thanks for that. This poem was good. You could understand what the boy is feeling. It was made evident in the writting. I'll review a couple more. IM me sometime. Sireneyes00.

Where do you get this **? It's beautiful!


Liar

So was I so cold and distant...

wonderful.

This is very poetic, and has some amazing lines. The first stanza is brilliant, and true in the context of the song.

Travis, this is absolutely pErFeCt! I want to see more poems and writings from yOu, like this, okay? I think this is where I can actually get it for once! Haha Other than that, I don't know where your talent comes from... All I know is that yOu are becoming more talented everyday! Keep up the awesome work!

-Me!

I have to say that this is your best poem structurally. Very, very well-structured and deep, and really sounds like Edgar Allen Poe's poetry. Though I am not a huge fan of his poetry, I am surprised that you are able to do this so well, travis. I am very proud of you.

When it comes to the story it made and the meaning, I support it. I'm not sure if this is what you were going for, but what I got from it was a man who was so in love and infatuated with his lover, he is no longer his own person. She leaves him because he is so much not the individualistic self he used to be and that his obsession(love) has come over him so much it has taken away his soul. Very profound and true...now if I could just talk you into getting the Olde English out of the title...

-C of D (Jofa)

P.S. Review some of my fiction and not my poetry.

wow...this one was really good, T. it's so sad tho...but very well written and the idea behind it is very good as well. she was the lonesome girl...but now "you" are the one who is alone