one of my favorites.
happy holidays and keep writing.

That was such an awsome story! Usually a story with more than about 35 chapters tend to be too long for me but there are exceptions!

::sigh:: But I really wished that Ayan would get Davin... not that I didn't like Rayal or anything. Its just that Ayan seemed so in love with Davin...

Ah...oh well, what matters is that this story rocked!

You have successfully choked me up. If I cry I blame you. Any sequels?? I would love a sequel. I loved the characters. I loved everything. Good job.

Brilliant! This story is delightful and I can't wait for the ending. Your a great writer. One thing. There are a few spelling errors and ect You've proberly noticed but it really bother someone so picky as myself.

Wow I sound proper. This swear jar thing really works.

I am really quite impressed by this story. No other story has kept me reading when I know that there are plently of chapters to come. Good job.

Wow. This story is really intriguing. Im eager to read the rest, can't wait to reach the end.

BOA

Beautifully written.
The story just flows with ease.
This is quite extravagent.

hey sorry I havent stared reading this story...really sorry.
brilliant first chapter.

uh...didn't you just recently say that Davin was fifteen? and not sixteen like you did in this chapter? you might want to work on that.

Hey,m I've read your story a long time ago and I want you to do a sequal. I plan on re-reading this darned thingO_O lol. But I do want to know if he ever rememebrs Rayal, or if anything ever happens to him in the rest of his lifeT_T Well, even if yu DONT write a sequal then it's an awesome story. And I love it^^

Though it made me sad that Davin was not able to stay with Rayal, I loved this story. It's so hard for me to find a good demon/paranormal/horror story that I really like (especially one that has slash in it). It would totally be awesome if you did a sequel to it where Davin is a little older and doing like a John Constantine thing...and a few appearances of Rayal wouldn't hurt *sigh* but I know that that's probably just wishful thinking. Anyway, I loved it and am adding it to my Fave story list!

This was a really good story. I've been reading this for two days. I loved the characters and the thrilling plot. I do have three complaints though.

1. I did notice some misspelled words here and there

2. Several of the chapters seemed a bit too short. It would have been better if you combined some of the shorter chapters together to make a longer chapter.

3. This is my opinion, but the ending seemed somewhat unresolved.

Despite my complaints I still liked this story.

OMG. I'm only on chapter seven and I have to say that this is by far one of the greasteast stories I've readin a long time. I hope when I post my stories on here soon you will read them and give me feedback. Keep up the good work.

Hi Sophie

I liked the story that you created and the characters. I read it through in one sitting and the story left me wanting more... I guess some closure about the tension that exists between Rayal and Davin.

I felt like the story kind of moved rather slowly and I also felt a little... bored? waiting for something to move the story along. Like when Davin was trapped with Ayan for a long time and during Davin's search for a way to reach Rayal. Like the details of the story was trickling together bit by bit. Maybe I'm just impatient and I'm not as engaged when there's no direct interaction between Davin and Rayal.

I also felt that the interactions between Davin and his parents were a little one-dimensional... like nothing interesting and unique was said...

What was the scene of the emergency room downstairs where Davin encountered Rayal? What kind of place is that actually. What about the book that was found holding the door open? And the role of the parents and the doctor patterson? To what end was Ayan intending?

Also there were a lot of small mistakes like mispelling. ^^

Please write more.I'm not really good at expressing what works in a story but its something that i read it to the end!!

This is a really good story!I would kind of like to see Ayan(?) again though. -puppy dog eyes