i cant seem to find some of your other stoires like bloos Stained and Where the heart is. maybe you can post the website at the end of this page plz & ty!

I really enjoyed your story! I am practically in love with mermaids and you word chioce is...wow there is not a word in the dictionary to decribe how well you write. PLease please plase add more to it. I can't wait to read more!

please continue your story!! its been 2 months! please!! its very intersting and not a lot of ppl write stories like this! i love mermaids and everything about it!

So good so far. Curious sister, overprotective big brother, really nice. I like the detailed description of them too. Some people tend to leave out the way the hair floats in the water and the bubbles and stuff that go along with a mermaid. You made it more realistic by taking the time to describe it. Good work!

o this is a cool story. i didn't even know you HAD this story. weird... anywho. good job. update soon. I stil don't see any ROMANCE in it yet. lol. jk. i bet there isn't going to be any... *sniffles sniffles* yeah, who cares. update soon! make the humans she see's realy hot. and have nice butts!
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luckynumba7
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the crazed lunatic dorky chick

are you going to update soon? it's a good story :)

Please continue, this sounds really cute!

Well, I'm too tired to scan this story for things that should be fixed, and it's well enough for my quick reading, so forgive me if I can't give a very constructive review, but I can tell you I like this so far, and I can't wait to see it develop. ^^

it's really good, write more!
~mel

Woah. That was pretty good. I liked the description, but it seemed the tiniest bit forced. Thats just me though. I always think something in a story is forced. Heh. TTYL. Keep writing your story. :D

Hey! I think the story is pretty good so far and with a little work it could be really really good. Any ideas for the rest of the plot yet? I like the idea of using mermaids...it gives a different depth to the story. Sorry for waiting for so long to review...there was a lot of stuff going on! Anyways, keep up the good work!

hey this is really good! i absolutely luve you descriptions! can't wait for more! *bubbles*

Lol, "Ok guys, I know you want to hear the tale. But I have to think it up first! " Made me laugh so hard, that was so cute! Priceless:) I also sort of think of it as a cartoon in my mind, mostly because all the supposedly "realistic" visual portrayals of mermaids look so damn cheesy! Jocelyn's character is cool, youthful and innocent, and your descriptions are, as always, first class. Update soon!

great chap:) i love your characters and setting:) it is really great:) oran sounds really cool;) like him alot and jocelyn sounds like she's fun:) very cute:) love the story so far girl:) great chap, excellent writing and description. i love it! keep it up and update soon;)

love your forever fan, freind and fellow author and favorite reviewer;),

Katelyn Devaney~*~

ps. thanks for all your help in my stories:) i aprreciate it more than you know:) thanks again love yas:)

HEY! great chapter. I like the interactions between them all. I like how energetic she is too! :)

Keep it up. I look forward to finding out just what this 'tale' is! :)

Panda