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| breaker-one 2003-07-28 ch 1, | abuseI liked the story a lot, but I think you could have expanded more on it. The ending seemed kind of misplaced since there wasn't a lot of build up to it through the plot and the characters. More chapters and a longer plot line would definatly improve this already great piece of work. |
| Della C 2003-07-17 ch 1, | abuseInteresting characters. But it's almost as if it ended too soon and too randomly. Your characters were BEAUTIFULLY created, but there wasn't quite enough set-up. |