   Alcaeus of Cronus 2004-06-19 . chapter 10Beautiful storyline and wonderful characters. Nice setting, too. Watch out for comma placement, and maybe sharpen up the dialogue. You should elaborate a bit more on your scenic descrptions, too.
Overall, great job! Update when you can. |
 SiLKi MaSSaCRe 2003-12-31 . chapter 9lol, that was good. Please update soon. :)
You update so much quicker than I do. It makes me realize my laziness... well, even more. Nice chapter. ^_^ |
 the red krayon 2003-12-26 . chapter 9that was great! BUT WHY THE CLIFFHANGERS! NO! |
 Yukina Fairy 2003-11-07 . chapter 8Well, as long as you won't have me thrown into a dungon, it is all cool. I enjoyed this chapter and when I get around to getting online, I will try to keep up with you.
~YFairy~ |
| the red krayon 2003-10-27 . chapter 8 Yipe! EVIL BROTHER COMES AND RUIN ALMOST EVERYTHING! AH! *runs around the room screaming* yup. that was a good chapter. i can't wait to find out what will happen next. suggestions? hm... lesse... well there's always the classic getting kidnapped or tricked into fighting thing. haha... just my minor ideas... |
| SiLKi MaSSaCRe 2003-10-24 . chapter 7 Yes, I think your friend should help you write the story more often. I'm not saying that you're bad, I'm just saying that it would be nice if you started writing with your friend. I honestly was not expecting Hoku to turn like that at the end! XP |
| the red krayon 2003-10-19 . chapter 7 AHH! IM CONFUSED!! WHAT'S GOING ON! IS HOKU THE BAD GUY AFTER ALL? WAH! I DON'T WANT HIM TO BE! *runs around the room screaming until i crash into a wall* oww...ahem... this was a really good chapter. the only bad thing was... IT'S A CLIFF HANGER! NO!
please update soon! please?
ja ne! |
| the red krayon 2003-10-19 . chapter 1 very good! It was very good! |
| Yukina Fairy 2003-10-10 . chapter 7 I want to appoligize for my last review, it was a little harsh. Tell you friend i liked his chapter, and it went in great with the story. I wish that your writer's block would go away, so i could read more of your story. Oh well, untill then. Byebye. |
 Shadeofwhite 2003-10-08 . chapter 7That was definitely unexpected. Please keep updating! |
 finalfanatic 2003-10-08 . chapter 7Is Hoku good or bad? IM CONFUSED! o well...still a good stiry, thou i like ur chaps better |
| Yukina Fairy 2003-09-19 . chapter 6 Great, you are going to leave us insusspense for like a month then come tell us one litle detail, thenbe gone another month. When you say you are badi take it as bad at keeping your readers happy. |
| SiLKi MaSSaCRe 2003-09-18 . chapter 1 Really good. But I didn't get the time to read all of the chapters. I'll review again soon. |
 Savol411 2003-09-17 . chapter 1hey there!
loved the story. I like your usage of words. You can put together 2 words and make them sound great! Keep up the good work!
Matt
Review my story:
Mosayio: Final Judgment |
| finalfanatic 2003-09-16 . chapter 6 THAT WAS GREAT!
and about the update thing, i dont mind it...i havent updated my story sence early august...or maybe july...i dunno. anyway great sory! keep it up! |
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