wow, that's more like it. That one i like. Out of all, that i like as it's not overly depressing as many poems on here are, You've clearly stated the points of emotion, i love "and i don't try to powder it all away with foundation and eyeliner" and starting it off when "my nails are ten different lengths" is good. write more like this one, with the same subtleties and you'll do well. Most of the people on this site write very bad stuff, and have silly sign in names about death and blood and vampires and their stories are overdone and uneventful...but yours, are not. There were a couple more i liked by you as well, i'll find them and review them

i love this. i think it's really straight to the point, you havent peppered in loads of metaphors to make it sound all philosophical, and it's simple which i think is great. When i read it, it sounds like a sad poem. not like ''arrghh im going to end it all'', just quite emotional in a subtle way. There isn't a negative criticism in my head at all. i love it!

At first I thought it was rather silly, but then I read "And if this was a perfect romance, / You'd love me for it.", and I put two and two together (or better: the title and those verses) and it just made sense. Good job on this!

I like. Casual, yet honest.