Reviews for Of Pain and Passion and Extreme Coincidence

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Anon. 2008-05-24 ch 10, anon.	abuseI was trying to figure out how that fit in. I was kind of thinking that maybe they were from Travis' old school or something. But it's killing me! How will the religious thing is a problem.
CrayonMentality 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuse"his dad had forgotten the "T" when writing Steven and his mom had liked the way Seven sounded and it went with the cute little birthday thing." That is the single, funniest reason for someones name I've ever heard. It's hilarious and didn't make the name annoying!! Poor Seven, I think his siblings do like him really. ^^'
SwitchVale 2008-03-12 ch 10,	abuseI feel bad that I haven't read this story in a while. Even with the serious realistic tones all around, the humor in this story makes it very so plausible. I know that this recent part did not include Seven and Travis, but it was a nice change, showing what was going on between Dinsmore and his rich girl. I like the break, it was an interesting POV change.
bluerose24 2008-03-06 ch 10,	abuseI hope that you update this soon.
Back of Beyond 2008-02-11 ch 10,	abuseI ddn't even realise Dinsmore had already sort-of been introduced until the very end with the phonecall. xD Anyway, nice chapter, though a little bit random to begin with. :P
DarkSweetRose 2008-02-04 ch 9,	abusei love this story. so cute. i like seven already he's my fav and travis so cute and tall lol. and i had a feeling he was going to move around seven's neighbor lol. ahah tat was funny about seven thinking it wasn't travis lol. good storie. plz plz update soon again :) my fav. me addy u :)
Back of Beyond 2008-02-03 ch 9,	abuseLove this story, hope you keep updating :]
merrymowmow 2007-12-16 ch 9,	abuseI was wondering when you're going to update?
magalina 2007-10-28 ch 9,	abuseAw, well I´m glad you´re still writing. Can´t wait to read the new version :DD
Back of Beyond 2007-05-16 ch 8,	abuseGreat story, hope you get back to writing this soon! ^^
stripedsocksarecool 2006-10-10 ch 8,	abuseYou must must must continue. I've fallen in love with Seven and Travis. And, the rest of the characters, of course. O, are PJ and Nick screwing? are they? are they? Ok, I'm out of my excited little kid moment... but I did really like your story, so please continue!
Ionai 2006-10-03 ch 8, anon.	abuseWowsers, you really made it ** yourself by introducing so many new characters! Best of luck writing them all in. I can remember Blaire(o'course),PJ, Rod, Annie, Tash, and Jeff off the top of my head, so(at least for me) Nick, Kelsey, and Omar aren't memorable yet. Loved the chapter, can see Seven's trying very hard not to be irritable (cracks me up).I eagerly await the next chapter ^_^.
Dillon1 2006-10-01 ch 8,	abuseIt's been forever since I first read this story, and I was pleasantly surprised to rediscover it today. I'm still in love with it, and ever so glad it's still being updated. Looking forward to the next installment, love!
Lady E 2006-09-30 ch 8,	abuseSeven's an awesome character. High IQ, low EQ. Best part is, his lack of social skills isn't due to insecurity but to contempt for society/humanity. More unique than the general crop of fics. However, I'd say this chapter was a little too heavy on introducing characters. I realize you're trying to differentiate the individuals and reflect Seven's observations of them, but your audience just won't be able to receive all of that detail at once. Ease up on character descriptions; instead of clumping them all in here, why not spread them out through the next few chapters as Seven gets to know each of them (or specific ones) better? "Show, don't tell" is classic and cliched, but it applies. You want to make your readers feel as though they know the characters without telling them directly, "He looked like this and was wearing this." Be sneaky. Thumbs up on PJ and Nick interaction. "Seven mused that if he were making a Sim of him, those personality bars would be full. Then Seven realized that this was probably a sign that he’d spent way too much time playing the Sims and should probably stop for a while." - Very cute and speaks a lot to Seven's hermit-like existence. However, the first sentence alone would carry the message just fine, so the second is superfluous in my opinion.
lonks 2006-09-26 ch 8, anon.	abusenice storyi can't wait to see what happens next!

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