I don't know...it seems too factual. Not enough imagery or emotions. It needs work.

i like the sounds of bent over and it was big then. good job. your perv. shippo

That was great! You should write a book of poems! And then get it published. And then maybe give me all the money you make off of it! Mwa ha ha!
I mean...uh...gotta go!

I like this poem, especially the format you wrote it in. Where there's one long line and a short line. I also like this poem because of the repetition in it.
Thanks for reviewing my poems!

I wish there were hurricans in south CA. You make them sound so cool, but no, all we get are earthquakes. Anyways, great piece. I wanted to tell you thanks for all the reviews ealier, but for some insane reason, I couldn't log into . Sorry, I have an incredbily old computer. Anyway, thankyou so much! I'll try to return the reviews.

This poem is an interesting reflection of the weather and its effects, but I think it could use a bi more dramatization

Not real email address... hope ya know... oh yeah, this is a review. DUH!Boy have I lost it! Great poem! Can't wait to read more!

Duo Maxwell Is Mine No Touchy

Nice little poem. I really like it. I got a new chapter up in Alpha and Omega, if you want to read it.

Wow! I just read an article about that hurricane a few minutes ago!

Could you review some of my junk? If it isn't too much to ask ...

Laterz,

LUNCH