The rhyme scheme is very different here. I've never seen it done like this. It's...different. I can't say this is your best yet, but you still did a good job.

Cirien Phoenix

hrm...didn't like this one much, the rhyming seemed a little wierd to me. *sigh* oh well...overall it was pretty good *_*

nicely done i like it! i totally know how you feel!

This is an interesting piece of work. I like it, it's very creaitve!