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secret thoughts revealed 2005-11-02 ch 1,	abusehi love this first chapter I have the same first name as the main character cool
Jezebel Malice 2004-09-16 ch 12,	abusehello... loverly job.. another fabulous chapter.
Damira 2004-07-26 ch 11,	abusewow...
Jezebel Malice 2004-03-31 ch 11,	abusemm, yummy. i like the 'innocent child inside of myself was crying out in agony and misery' part. i dont know why, i just kind of do. keep it up. ~jessi rose~
Dark Lalage 2004-03-30 ch 11,	abuseaw! i wish u would have went farther on woth the story! i love this story so keep writing! lots of love and angst!
Sakuya Li 2004-03-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseGreat first chapter... I can't wait to get started on all ther rest... XD I'd have to agree with NeverNeverLand on this one... I love the plot of your story... It's great!! If you try and use more unique nouns/pronouns and adjectives in the story it can add to the emotions your readers are receiving from your writing... And it can add to the suspense as well... ^^ Refer to my review on Xanga... TTYL Kesei! Your Friend, ~Sakuya Li~
Dark Lalage 2004-02-23 ch 10,	abusethe more u write on this story the more i love it keep going kat! Cacique
Dniwmage 2004-02-21 ch 10, anon.	abuseNice story! My xanga is mainly Selece. I love this story!
drew 2004-02-20 ch 10, anon.	abusewoah, compelling and sexy, i'm stuck, i must know more! you'll do great in life, i guarantee it, just keep up the good work!
drew 2004-02-20 ch 1, anon.	abusethat was a great, compelling story, i would like to read more, i have nothing but time, so i can read all you want me to! send me an email telling me which of your stories and poems you would like me to read, and your generosity would be greatly appreciated. this story put me in your character's place, and led me through every step, every breath of your journey, so arigato for letting me read your stuff! Signed, Drew (uyu)
Jezebel Malice 2004-01-03 ch 10,	abuseoh...vampire lovin'...interesting i really like this fic. i look forward to your updates. ^__^ ~jessi~
Jezebel Malice 2003-12-24 ch 9,	abusem...i love this story so much. maybe its my insane love for vampire stories. or is it my addiction to german...m german... in any case, it is very well written. ~jessi rose~
NeverNeverLand 2003-12-01 ch 8,	abuseA very dramatic close to the chapter, and beautifully written as well. How a girl could have survived it all I may never know. Perhaps you could tell me. You know, refusing to repetitively use the same pronoun in a single paragraph and using some older, lesser known adjectives can lend a narrative a more ancient sound. Send the reader to an elder land forgotten amongst the latter threads of story. Show us that our girl is grown and knows how to get what she wants. Tell me what kind of predator she is. Write on. Something whispers of a masterpiece in the making.
NeverNeverLand 2003-12-01 ch 3,	abuseOh, the suspense! Curse this blasted internet connection for slowing my passage to the next chapter! Curse all the people that make the internet slow! Curse them! Curse them all to . . . somewhere where they don't have milk to go with cookies! Only the most severe of tortures must be given as punishment for these, the banes of my existence! This is getting way too fun and way too good. I was kinda hoping she was dead, but sleeping for 22 years was a twist I would never have thought of. The plot grows thicker!
NeverNeverLand 2003-12-01 ch 1,	abuseFinally, finally, finally a story for me to scream to. Please tell me that you're getting an agent pretty soon. The public needs to hear what you have to say. I don't know what help it would be to critique the first chapter when you've already got eight, but I figure what the heck. It's a very original setting that you've created and I can tell that you're very comfortable with the character. I find that the person I feel most comfortable writing about is one I can relate to. What person do I know better than I? Your spirit makes itself manifest as you pour your words onto the screen. Bravo! Behold, for Johnalee has spoken.

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