That was so sweet! (applauds!)Very good.I don't have much in the way of critism, except that you add more detail and that you don't ttry and rush it.Other than that, this was wonderful!

Awesomeness ! Very sweet story...I liked it.

::goes off to read more::

!bQ

Gr8 story...and very sweet. I like it lots!!

Aww, that was sweet! You have an excellent plot in mind though I feel that you have to put more description into your details and described the emotions that the characters are feeling more instead of just what's occuring with them. I thought you rushed it a bit with the Hanako scenes, but that's all right, nothing big. Update soon!

This is a nice short story with a really cool plot. Though my only thoughts on it is that it is very vague in description of scenery and emotion. I didn't feel the love that the characters shared. I enjoyed the plot very much! It was quite wicked!