 theblindman 2003-11-09 . chapter 1Heh, I like this one. The last couple of lines are very powerful, especially since you emphasize them by using an alternate rhyme-scheme. I'm not sure if you want to take that further and divide it into three lines instead of two.
Though filled with glee
I'd rather be
holding Jamie's hand.
I dunno. Anyway, it's a great poem, I'm really impressed.
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