gosh darn lady.ive never ever read something so not published and yet something i can relate to so closely.
UM anyway its real good keep up the writing.

You really have a way with words; instead of concentrating on the text itself, you managed to make me picture the entire scene, in such a natural way. And it was kinda funny.

nahaha. i love it. nicely written, very amusing. good job.

That was some sweet writing, even if it is just a short encounter. I adore your style of writing, and this whole piece. Kudos.