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layby-cougar 2004-10-28 ch 3,	abuseWOH. Nice! Didn't explain the whole owner thing, but that's good- leaves me hanging for the next one! I forgot a few things before (stupid considering I've reviewed twice already)- the song thing as your chapter title is cool. Although I only really know Maroon 5. lol. And I like your humour, it's not overdone so that's fantastic...And OH! HOW COULD I FORGET? ROMANCE! there had BETTER be romance in this!! grins happily PLEASE? :) Love, Carmen P.S. Write more! If I finish exams on the 5th and come back to find you haven't written more, you will be soundly abused.
layby-cougar 2004-10-28 ch 2,	abuseHEHEHEE. I love your good ole references to American society, they're amusing. And glad to be filled in about what's happened so far. And another thing- I love your formatting. The [ On the outside ] bit is wicked! (First thing I noticed, but forgot to comment on before) And this- "again, it's not like they would have been trying to hump us, or anything." got a laugh outta me. Excellent work! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
layby-cougar 2004-10-28 ch 1,	abuseoh. my. GOSH. Need I say more? Well yes Carmen you idiot otherwise you won't make sense...Well ok, this is fantasticness. Yes I know I am making up words. Yes, I have an english extension exam tomorrow and I'm online reading your AWESOME story that has stunned me into saying made up diminuitives. No, I am not crazy...Oh alright I'm in denial. But one thing I no for sure- this was awesome. I wasn't too caught on until the end, which had me :O (insert emoticon there) So please keep it up, and moi, the Queen of Cliffys says that this was a damn good cliffy! I will read the rest now, but please update soon! Love, Carmen
DKiplan 2004-07-01 ch 3,	abuseI like it. Everything is so strange and I'm not sure what's going on, but I like it. The first chapter was the one I liked the best. it had great imagery in it and i felt like I was running with her. I noticed its been a while since you updated. I hope you decide to continue with this story. It has my interest peaked. I'm also wondering what happened to her friends (and what her first name is) I think the description of Riviera is really good.
Simeon The Conqueror 2003-07-22 ch 2,	abuseWell in the first chapter you had a couple run-ons...but other than that it was good. I saw this after posting a story and the sypnosis said, "Review and I'll review yours." So I said what the hell. I like the character, well the main character. You don't really know her from besides Miss Hinber. She is a good character, tough, strong, but inside she is emotionally weak. She doesnt, and probably never will, prove it but you can sense the feminine terror. (nothing against feminine supporters) The other character that we've met so far, Riveria I think, first reminded me of Vash, from Trigun. Though I quickly changed my mind. -A long review by Simeon.

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