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Rio's Desire 2007-04-19 ch 4,	Oh! What a sweet guy, he's a real Zorro, saving people. Or just her...I don't know yet. So write more! I want to know what happens to her and if he teaches her how to dance, or maybe they get caught together by his parents and he is sentenced to death! Okay I got carried away. But seriously, I think you've got something here, and you should definitely break open that writer's block if you have one.
candy 2006-07-02 ch 4,	plz update soon =)
atreyu love 2006-03-05 ch 4,	interesting.. youre on my fav authors list, so please update :)
Bookworm12-8-90 2005-06-09 ch 4,	this is really good! update soon please!
Quarantine 2005-05-01 ch 4,	Well, hmm... I like this story as well as the Astrea one, but youi haven't updated it in forever, so I THOUGHT I'D REMIND YOU THAT IT EXISTED. Not that I really think you forgot. So update one soon and I won't have to review like this, 'kays? Byebye now.
Perihelion 2005-04-01 ch 4,	Great story...UPDATE SON!(ps. I love how you emphasized Petuna's snobbishness so quickly and well.)
persephone's sketchbook. 2005-01-30 ch 4,	I'm back! I decided to read this since I loved your "Starlight: Astrea's Story." I REALLY hope that you work on this one as well. It is very good. I do not know what it is about your writing that I like. I think it is your general writing style. Whatever it is, this story is very good.
Soul's writings 2004-05-11 ch 4,	This is an excellent story - please update soon, i'd really like to know how it works out!
Twildre Droan 2004-04-23 ch 4,	This is such a great story (as are all of yours). I cant wait for more! Yes, precious, we loves it. Unfortunatly, I have nothing useful to say except that it is really good, which I am sure has been said by other people. Twildre
Schmee 2004-01-24 ch 4,	AWESOME STORY! I love it! Please continue as soon as possible, becuase I want to know what happens next! You are a great writer, and I have no critisisms at all!
Cindy Moon 2004-01-22 ch 1,	Awesome start. I'm really getting a feel of the characters(although I think you interchanged the spelling on Petuna at times) I'll be sure to keep up with this story. Yours in art and Christ, Cindy Moon *)
Lirael Goldenhand 2004-01-22 ch 4,	HEH! "“Any guesses who I am?” I stared. “Go on.” There was a smile behind the words. My brain seemed to have ceased functioning for the night. “I . . . uh . . . um . . . I . . .”" I love that! Now KEEP GOING, or BAD THINGS will happen! Like...em...yes, bad things! Bad, BAD things!
Lirael Goldenhand 2004-01-22 ch 3,	Ek! You might want to slow this chappie down, though; it goes a bit too fast...maybe put in more of a section/dialogue for when they're leaving the ball-thing, and then dialogue for the Riordans arguing...?
Lirael Goldenhand 2004-01-22 ch 2,	NO! NOT A CLIFFIE! ARGH, cliffies are EVIL! glares Eh well, it's all your fault so I'll make a short review...eh shoot, I guess not. sulks ANYHOO. I like! Fire-dances...shiver I love the term! Sounds AWESOME (listening to Celtic music). "His pupils were a dark turquoise, flecked with hints of gray, and they were laughing, sparkling madly in the torchlight." Hmm...irises? Or is it normal for pupils to be differently colored in Lorien (coughTolkiencough)...shoot, now I'm confused...eh well, it doesn't matter. winks In the last chappie I noticed that you called the people "Lariens", yes? It might make sense to change the name of the land, but I don't really care...it's coolies! ^.^ Err...anyhoo, enough babbling and onto the next chappie! vanishes
Lirael Goldenhand 2004-01-21 ch 1,	o.O Very nice! I like...but I noticed that for the first few paragraphs her name was "Petula" and then it changed to "Petuna". Is there a reason for this? (Petulant...Petula...?) It went a bit fast- then again, maybe that was your intent- but managed to hold itself together despite that rather better than mine. I like! ~LG~

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