this is a great intro. i have pretty much no clue what has happened but it sounds god. ^_^

this is extremely interesting. i wish there was more and can't wait for you to add to it

Hey! This is good! Granted, I'm a little confused at the moment. Did or did not our herione just die? Anyway, I'm sure that will all be explained later in the story. Keep writing! Can't wait for the next chapter!