Whoa, the image of a hao mien-type china doll made of pieces glued together and tied with lace, with drops of glue going up and down the face ... very good

oh, that's amazing... "one small hand extended in a silent scream" - brilliant. the last two lines are killer.

That was dark indeed..

Beautifully written all the same.. I liked some of the images potrayed like the part about the glue and hairline cracks..

Interestin metaphor, with profound meanings behind..

The structure is good because each line is short, and perhaps that was to potray the choking..

Great ending.. Especially how you just hinted slightly, but not really telling..

Beautiful and amazing piece...

Keep it up..

Shadafakup

darkness is good. at least in writing, if not life. the mentioning of glue as marring is really unusual, which makes it stand out. for some reason i really like that image. it's jsut really visceral somehow.

This intrigues me. Very well done. Favorite line: "one small hand extended/in a dainty silent scream" Dark, but hey, dark is best.