Perfect life becomes imperfect, adn the mind cracks, capturing the sould forever in a dream of perfection from memories...? Well, one way to look 'seriously' at it. It was neat, whatever the real happening was.

That's really neat. It's a cool story. I got kind of confused how Rosalyn changed to a 7 year old to a 14 year old, but they could be different people. If that's true then change "Rosa", sounds too much like Rosalyn. Othe than that, this was really cool. I like how it all came around and made sense. It was cool. You could talk more about Rosa's love for Jonathan, or something like that. But it was cool. I liked the idea of everything being perfect. Because it's so not true, that it made it seem for a moment that it was. Great Work!-K.T.

Wow, interesting piece this is. Awsome discription at the end here. Great work.
happy hunting
~Midnight Predator~
Thanks for your review. I don't know where the name Moira came from, names just come to me.

oh por Jonathan…..i am not crying. I don’t do that….heheh ^-^ nice cat thingy

That's really good.

o.o It's quite good.