Mages? Healers! Zomg, RPG moment.

Black mages? If Vivi shows up this this story I am going to have a fangirl scream.

Ribbons in their hair? Hmn... I am trying to picture it in my head.
I am curious about this mourning thing.
WHERE ARE THOSE CHILDREN'S PARENTS?!

O wait... they are Centuran, right? That means they might LOOK like teens but actually be like... over 9,0 years old?

They could definitely market an anti-aging creme.

Now here's a story about a man named Jed...
A poor mountaineer, barely kept his family fed...

Just kidding. ^_^ Once again, bringing forth the more technological, rave-type clothing and modern imagery to clash with my internal notions of "back in the day" sort of setting. I think it was the FARM reference and the curious names that made me have a predisposition for that feeling.

I like the eye thing. Why are their eyes different from anyone else's? Genetics? Or is there a specific purpose other than to mark them as different?

I don't know why but the first two chapters gave me the impression that the setting was of the fantasy/historic/medieval type. Now that RADIOs and other technology are introduced it makes me quirk an eyebrow and readjust my mind's eye on the matter.

I think you should make a timeline of events for this story and include it somewhere. :3 I am curious about it. I know that "time" isn't that important to some characters and namely this one, but it would be interesting to see exactly the sequence of events in proper order, as referenced. ^o^

Hm... this chapter makes me wonder who the speaker is. O_o

Oh, bitter boy characters! Add him to the "boys who need hugs" list, right?

^_^ I have always liked your choice of names for characters. They are unique, and yet still maintain pronounceable qualities. Yay for names I can actually SAY.

UPDATE! PLEASE!
it's been almost a year since your last one.
i love this story, and i would love to see where you're going with it.
also, how old does rayek LOOK?

I was wondering when you're going to update?

I was wondering when you're going to update?

good story...Now UPDATE! REALLY REALLY QUICK!

I've been reading this for awhile, I just hadn't realized that I didn't review. This story is really well written, with a very interesting plot, and the narration is refreshingly unique. Really nice work. On the other side, there are a few typos, as was pointed out, and they don't really hinder the story.

Bravo! ::claps hands:: Excellent, as good if not better than the previous chapters. One small flaw. You have dieing, it should be dying. Fabulous work. Kepp it coming.

An intriquing stry witha nice flow. i look forward to reading more.

Have I reviewed before? If not, I should have, as I've read this chapter before. I totally love this story...even by just reading the first chapter LOL. The writing style is great, gentle and flowing without seeming maudlin. Dakar sounds interesting. Plus, we get a bit of the history while being introduced to the story, which is really awesome, as its well done and not obtrusive like many fics of this style I've read. Makes me jealous, hehe.
Keep writing! I'm glad to see I've still got many chapters to catch up on!

Well, I'm only on chapter two, but I already know I'm really going to enjoy this. Your story sounds very interesting, and it's so well written, I can almost believe these places and these cultures actually existed. Everything sounds so real. It's wonderful. ^_^

Keep up the good work!

Lyrique