Good, i am not really sure what to say since you really didn't give me a fair chance at neopets but-i can be very forgiving and can't hold a grudge for more than five minutes. This is very sad but i do like the line "pouring my blood on paper" IT's very suicidal, like everyother poem here but in a way it is less suicidal than others in away, nice job. Feel free to check out some of my stuff (i only made a few mistakes) Nice job.
Animequirk-Silversky.

a lot of repeats of "see". Maybe you did it on purpose? Use other words maybe? Perceive. Eye (I eye the apple). If you do this on purpose, have it say "I see the red sea of blood", a play on words.

wow...really good

Nice, me like.

Really good. Interesting. I like it lotz!
-Kris
P.S. Me would greatly appreciate it if you checked out some of my stuff, pwease? lolz! I HAVE NO SHAME! heh

OOh - blood. Fun stuff *grins evily - uh oh* Well, I think it is really good, and if it confuses people they must not understand too much to begin with. It's a really good poem, especially the last three lines - very cool thought. Yay!! Ally's gonna be a writer. ^_^ cool stuff

Hmm... thought that first commenter might find this ammusing: *grins* The poem is about how I dont express things clearly enough!

It's good stuff, I like it a lot. I gave up on poetry a long time ago, as you know. You seem to have a greater grasp on it than I ever did. But anyway, there's my late night, so called review.

I can see where you are going but try to express your thoughts more clearly finish a point then start on another or you will be confusing your audience a bit of mystery is good dont lose that but just tone it done a bit. Leave so mystery. I couldn't really see where you were going with the whole thing. so just try to express your thoughts more clearly