Reviews for Internal Bleeding

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Calvin Wong 2004-07-19 ch 1,	Does Death stare her children in the eye as she transports them to her midnight realm? This poem exposes some primal fear within us; some deep desire to stand and fight, to look fear in the eye and spit in it. That's how it made me feel. Vintage Izzy. Excellent work.
Martinet Of the Order 2004-06-30 ch 1,	Whoa there, hold on while I check the sick-o-meter. Do note, sick is one of the highest compliment I can dish out. (example: Neil Gaiman is a sick puppy!) The flow is abit disrupted, but it still reads well, deep stuff. Cheers. P.S. You mispelled Leeched for Leached. Re-Cheers.
Robyn D 2004-05-30 ch 1,	okay this one i like, pure and simple. good metaphor. and i love the title. congrats to whomever suggested it to you. later days bells
giygas666 2003-11-19 ch 1,	I opened my e-mail inbox this afternoon, and lo and behold...you reviewed ALL of Neverland, not to mention my Martha Stewart story, two of my essays, and Part One of NDR! You must've really enjoyed them to leave so many reviews. Many, many thanks for being so kind to review, and for your constructive criticism. A lot of reviewers just say "I liked it" or "this is good" without elaborating, but you obviously put a lot of thought into it; I appreciate that. Thank you. And I'll definitely be returning the favor. And now, after three minutes...on to the review... I was hooked by the very first stanza. This is extrememly vivid, and I can see that it's metaphorical, although I can't quite decide if it's a metaphor for suicide ("The rich red substance/Leaving my body/Hoarded by Greed"--a greedy desire to live?) or love (the idea that you've been hurt by someone and one day you'll be able to face that person). Lots of possibilities here, it's very intriguing. Excellent work!
Ellerfru 2003-11-08 ch 1,	Interesting. You really seem to like to write about blood... And yes, I realized that this is methaphorical. :)
heartofwatanabe 2003-11-06 ch 1,	i really really love this. Even better than "Let Go"
JTierra1988 2003-11-05 ch 1,	I really like this poem. Really good job on holding the metaphor throughout the piece. The metaphor is direct. Well written I like the structure ^_^ JMBunny
Werecat99 2003-10-18 ch 1,	I liked that. The images of blood fit perfectly with the sense of loss one experiences when betrayed. Good work. And thanks for the review.
Tifa Highwind 2003-10-17 ch 1,	Your writing is very nice, I'll read some more of your other writings later. (Please Read + Review my work if you have the time to)
Shadafakup 2003-10-17 ch 1,	Oh dear, Im rushing this which probably means the review will suck much.. But I didn't want to leave a good piece of work unreviewed.. Anyway, rhythm and flow of the piece was pretty good, pace was natural too.. Just wonderin why are Kith and Kin in capital letters.. Theme was perfect.. I enjoyed it too.. I dont really like the third stanza though, it was a bit off.. But loved the ending.. The last two words were simply effective.. Powerful.. Great job.. ~Shadafakup P.S. You went for the Linkin Park concert? I am so jealous.. I just couldnt make it.. (I'm from Singapore btw) And phew, you are one lucky person.. =)
Devious Angel XDemon 2003-10-17 ch 1,	this was really really good. Very nice work.
Opera Ghost Kid 2003-10-17 ch 1,	whoa... tis good... and depp. I like it. n thanx for yur review... hmm, my third stanza did seem kinda choppy didn't it?? hm...
Lytheria 17th 2003-10-17 ch 1,	Thanks for the review, I especially like this poem. You worded it beautifully. and we share a common intrest -- we both like the theme of blood!! lol.
mooKittyKat 2003-10-16 ch 1,	wow...I'm speachless Very deep and very good. Keep writing ~Kar
echoes of chaos 2003-10-14 ch 1,	that was awesome. you have a great way of expressing yourself and i hope you continue to do so.

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