good story line but what the heck was with the "ploot, blat, psich" thing? That was just weird. Anyway, good story over all. I really liked it.

Interesting. The plot is very reminiscent of a story I read in AP Spanish. I think it was by Garcia Lorca but it could have been Allende. Forget who. Anyways, interesting. And your "Ploot Blat Psich" makes no sense. Shoulda chosen better whatdoyoucall those things...

It started off well enough, built an understanding of the main character but the ending was sort of dissapointing, sorry to say.

I don't know what the heck you mean by "Ploot Blat Psich". And there are also some spelling and grammer errors in the last few lines. Other then that it was pretty good.

** Liang! That was actually good! Scary.

I liked the idea for this story, especially the ending.
Aight!