You've contrasted differences between the characters very well, each having their own ranking in the social ladder! You should really update soon so we readers can read the rest of the story! =)

Sweet chapter! They seem to have a lot in common.. I hope Keiran stands up for himself as he develops in the story. ~mimi.

Interesting introduction..very funny as well. I like that kindy kid example, I couldn't help laughing out loud. =D

keep writing!

i like it, keep going ... i dont have any critis ... but i really like the story so keep it up!

Update soon

Jorja : )

Cool..I like it...please update soon!!
~Ave

Really good job! please update soon! If, u haven't noticed i've reviewed a lot of ur stories cuz im just looking at ur page thingy. Anyway great stories so far :)

Awesome story! I like it!! More please!!

COOL! I like your writing! Keep updating!

tis good story, and i cant stand Grace
^_^

o, nadine sounds so evil, yet human. good work on this chapter, i like this fic second best after your aphaya one!

Aw! I wish real life could work out, like I hope it will for the characters. Sad how I can relate. This story is very realistic and enjoyable and I hope it continues.

no i want more!
tis funny and interesting!

well, besides the fact that i'll be miserable until there's more ;) i love it! I really like the laid back personal style of it. There no pretentions. The part about seeing the bus at the bus sitting comfortably doesn't really go with missing the bus...mabye a different adj. to describe the bus at the end of the street? To me that was the only rough spot. I can't wait to read more!!

I like the idea for the story. It's a very original and very good story. The part in the beginning before the dream confused me a little, though. Please keep writing.