And another. Probably the last for the day. I should really get SOME work done, I suppose!
1.) "It's still hard to deal with the pain / You called my name and said. / "I still like you, It's just not the same," / ... " -- Grammar stuff: There should be a comma, not a period after 'said'. Also, 'It's' shuoldn't be capitalized.
2.) "That's when I get this sinking feeling," -- Why a comma at the end? Take a look at the ending punctuation of all your lines in this stanza.
3.) "I start to wonder how a when," -- Typo: 'and'.
4.) "Im drifting off to bed again." -- Typo: 'I'm'.5.) "I guess im just never going to bed." -- 'I'm' causing you troubles today?
Nice poem. I think I like this one better than the last. Especially the counting the bumps on the ceiling part. Also, it's much easier to read, because of the layout. I think the weakest part is probably the first stanza -- 'mad' and 'sad' are weak words, and you empasize them.
Also, you might want to go throw and pick a rhythm scheme. Pick the number of syllables per line, and stick to it through the entire song/poem. It's close, now, so you don't notice it while reading silently, but if you read it aloud, the inexactness jumps out at you. Just a suggestion -- I'm not much into free-rhythm if the poem already rhymes. It always feels only HALF structured, then, which is uncomfortable.
See ya!
Ruatha

Hm...this is like the fifth review you've gotten from me tonight. I love this one too. Your a really talented writer.

Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. I really like this poem. I can relate... I really like the line "Six hours, five thousand fou hundred sixty-two bumps later." idk... just a cool line i guess. I also really like the last stanza.

I like the rhyme scheme; a few extra syllables in a few verses didn't quite seem to fit.

i like this 1...its very deep lol...notice i havent read ur story...im not n2 sci-fi crap...srry...but im sure its great...i jus wouldnt be able 2 keep up w/ it

WOW! Thats good!
Two lines seemed SLIGHTLY forced are these two:
"I guess that I should be mad" and
"I guess that I should be sad."
My opinion is it loses rhythym with Guess. Read it back to yourslef and see if you notice what I mean...

- Crucified Sanctity -

this is good, but i dont think its quite the international standard of the other one but it depends on the tune you have given it. but still good and strong which is excellent! well done.