That is a very moving poem, and appears to hold several meanings.

And to think I only read it because I noticed your author name 'Grendel' - probably my favourite Marillion song alongside 'Fugazi'

Very good poem, the short, simple stanzas were effective in bringing across the overall message. Even if it was sad. Keep up the good work :)
*cosmo-queen*

Ah.. That was tragic.. But the story told in poem was great.. Interestin.. Great choice of words and I liked the way you twisted and manipulated them so well.. Good piece.. Enjoyable and to say the least, amazing.. I liked it.. =)

The story is this is really good! It's very true...Some of the lines grouping is funky though (like going from "dreams at his grasp" to "cheecks had dried". They're very different), but it still gets the point across in a powerful away. Really good! I like! *clicks favorite stories*

that was AMZAING poem! wow! such passion and all, emotionfilled n all. wow! its so nicley worded and explained. i love this! great job!
Tara