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| Day2Dreamer 2003-11-30 ch 1,   | hey there! nice work! i figured after reading your main story that i should read the rest of your stuff.. it's quite good! i love the way it's misleading, although, for impact, perhaps you shouldn't have mentioned the actual words "bungie jumping".. it sorta lessens the impact, because the idea is fairly obvious when you hear the phrase 'rope around her ankles'. Overall, though, congratulations! have a great day! ~Day2Dreamer |
| la JazzFish 2003-07-29 ch 1, | "Gasp!" said I. "Why do I care that she's committing suicide?" Then... I saw the light. Heh. XD Nice job and kudos. ("A few feet away a man tells her that she ‘doesn’t have to do this,’ and she ‘can change her mind.’" Tres cute.) |
| AVIGON 2003-07-29 ch 1, | You had me fooled there for just a while. Up until the last two paragraphs I wasn't liking it, but when I realised it wasn't just another I'm-sad-so-I'm-gonna-off-myself-story, I thought it was pretty good what you did in such a small text. Congratulations on pulling my leg BTW. ;o) |
| Nyze Skairey Aptle 2003-07-29 ch 1, | Now i need to go but a jump rope and trip over it. |