Looks like you have an account on this site too, huh? Cool! ^_^ Well, I love your writing style (you include interesting dialogue in your writing pieces and always have a stong, tough-gripped plot with plenty of sudden twists and turns), but I think something you could improve here on is the descriptivity (?) of the setting where all of this is happening. I mean, I see you've already shown us what the place looks like and all, but maybe you could make it clearer WHERE this girl is, WHAT is she doing there, and exactly what's going on... because honestly, I'm a bit confused. Maybe I just didn't read this one clearly enough, but it seemed to me like you weren't explaining too much about what was going on here, although we can already infer some things -- like she was standing in the woods, in the beginning, she is from another world, she can use magic --, but a good idea would be to tell us how she got to this OTHER world... maybe some kind of prologue? Or flashback? Or memory? I'm not sure, just trying to help out! ^_^ I really love all of your stories and fanfictions, and I admire you as an author. YOU ROCK! I can't wait to read something else from you, and if you could, do you think you could take the time out to read my story on this site (fictionpress...) as well? I'd be honored. *bows to songwind*

Keep up the breath-taking work!

Wow! I love your story! It's really good! And the Night Mage is so cool! Are you going to continue it?

Again, great job! Your descriptions are amazing...and this plot is getting very exciting! Your character 'Adriana' is very cool as well! Keep it up!! ^_^

~*~The Goddess of Night~*~

Great job, wonderful really. Nice characters, and an awesome plot so far! ^_^ Your descriptions are great too! Keep it up!

~*~The Goddess of Night~*~

Person- Hello... SONGGIE-DONO! It's me, Kimiko! I like dis so far... ^^ I shall continue reading...but at a later time...X_X *it's getting late* Yay! I shall post something, hopefully, soon! Wow...not having to write disclaimers...*tears* It's so wondeful.. *sniffle*

~Ja!
The Bandit Kitsune

...And you had to end it THERE. I'm giving you an extremely disapproving look over the top of my glasses, because of course I disapprove of cliffhangers in principal, if not in practice. Oh well.

Fascinating. I really LIKE the idea of someone travelling through the universes looking for magic. You'd think that people like Adriana would find *something*.

It's a good idea, and a good beginning to it. Could you rephrase this bit, though? 'his smile quickly faded and he stared at the door behind him' - I got confused over which him was which, and it took me a moment to realise what you meant.

No! More! Your style is so engaging. I only clicked on the story to get an idea of wot was about but then I was hooked. Hooked, I tell you. Adriana's a great character. Her reactions to poor old Gar and his mention of the evil sorcerer - just classic. Let's just say I laughed. Hard. And wot's happened to David? How can you leave us like that? I can only hope you'll be updating soon.