Loved it. Very oringinal, easy to read aswell. To improve it...i think maybe to explain it a little better, how she is telepathic, and how the fire wont touch her, that kind of thing. Great read!

Sami

lol I like the ending sentence. It was a great story. I liked the whole plot, and it was well written. My only problem was that you wrote "thru" instead of "through." If you are going to write a story, take the time to make it neat. It was well written though, so good job.

Your story kicks the **! I love it! manke more, please!

pretty interesting.

Good story! I liked it! I liked how you made her more of a person by allowing her to make mistakes, rather than being inhuman. I did notice something though... did you mean to spell "through" as "thru"?? Just wondering. Really good story, overall!
Inicana