I like the descriptions, awesome story!

Okay. You did a good job with this story. I like the way that you used the descriptions. You also got into the emotions of this heroine as she fought the bad guys. Nice job.

This is a great story. You drove the point home. However, it would be great if you added more. More chapters you know. Like maybe just a prologue and maybe and epilogue if you couldn't do more. I don't know about others, but I personally think that there are a lot of questions unanswered. Why did she not want to feel pain? How did Dr. Taylor discover this all? There are just lots of questions.

By the way, you are welcome to any of my stories. I'm a poor pathetic writer without reviewers. :(

You're story's great though. :)

Hm. Interesting. I think the story could be better if there was more attention to detail. The short choppy sentences are only effective for a short while. It seems as if you were in a rush to finish it, and therefore the reader doesn't get the full blow of the emotions that the words tell you you should be feeling.

WOW!BRILLIANT storyline,BRILLIANT! only wish is for you to write MORE!

This is an odd story, with an interesting central idea, but the writing lets that down. The separation of clauses alluded to by a previous reviewer might be seen as integral to establishing the cold, detached psyche of the protagonist, but they make the reading very hard. You can get across these sort of themes without making the going tough for your readers. Similarly, the story itself is rather childish, with special formulae and bizarre drugs organizations. Why make the woman a super hero, when it would be far more interesting to explore emotional incapacity in a normal life situation?

Dude, you rock man. I'm writing a story about a hero too: The Hacker. Anyway, why'd u stop? Don't have anymore to write about?

Your Story ROCKED!

Now this was a spiffy little story. It's very enjoyable, and moves at a breath-quickening pace. Despite the little run-on sentences that you use (like after a sentence, you'd have "Running from the pain." That's a run-on and should have been combined with another sentence by a comma, but it's all good if that's your style), the story was well-written and well-imagined too, and what a great weakness for a heroine made out of ice! Good job, and hope to see more.

Now thats a much better ending than some of ur others, i much prefer a happy ending than a sad one, no matter how well its written!
'Nother good story, off 2 read another!

Wow, I like, I like. It's a bit short, but you've packed alot into it. Nice job!