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| maggiepyro101 2007-10-11 ch 1, | abusehow cute ^^ |
| JoC 2004-10-18 ch 1, anon. | abusefinally back after a long absence. haha. anyway, nice piece of work =) at first i thought the little boy was in love with the manneguin. was wondering how it was possible for a young boy. now iknow better. anyway, nice way to reveal the truth. =) great writing as usual... hee... |
| silverg3r 2003-08-01 ch 1, | abusehello... BOO!~ its sweet. gee, i must be one of the slowest people on this world. =) beautiful fic!~ =) ur vacob good sia... =) i write things like i'm half dead. sigh. copyrighted? amusing. read more jimmy! jimmy~ nothing wrong with tt... the little boy's history is so mysterious. =) waiting fer the next one. =) |
| gniq 2003-08-01 ch 1, anon. | abusewah... maybe u ARE reading too much of jimmy's book... u know wad, actually i felt a bit eerie when i read this fic coz i think mannequins are scary. i had a first aid course at the red cross society last year and i swore the CPR mannequin smiled at me~! i was so damn freaked out.. till now i'm still scared of mannequins. so despite the beautiful way u described the mannequin, i have this stupid feeling that it's evil or some sort? haha... it's a good piece of writing tho, detailed descriptions. very creative=) |
| Ixion Goddess 2003-07-31 ch 1, | abuse(Out of all places, i'm stuck in my mothers office reading fiction...)anyway, I just have to say how wonderfully magical this peice of work is! Your style is so distinct in this story, I dont think I have ever read anything quite like it before, for that you should be very proud of yourself ^_^. The story itself is magnificant and special. You manage to manifest a feeling so uniqe through your peice with very little words, not many writers have the talent for that! Good job, and keep up the splendid work! -Ixchel |
| miya_wada 2003-07-30 ch 1, anon. | abusewada: wa kao...i am speechless. what do you expect me to say? tt im very jealous etc? oh well, anyway, good writing, wide range of vocab [really surprised that you were the one who said i used words that even you didnt know until recently when you've used words here tt i'd nv use in compos, or anywhere else for tt matter], sweet family love story btwn the boy and his mother. |
| talkingbanana 2003-07-30 ch 1, | abuseinteresting short story, great descriptions - overall, a good piece, even though it leaves me a little bit confused about the whole thing. why is the mannequin so important? i'm guessing it reminds the boy of his mother - dead? the unanswered questions make this piece very entertaining to read and think through; you've given the reader just enough details and left the rest to his/her imagination. keep up the good work! |