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| greenelephant 2005-07-25 ch 7,   | This is great I cant wait until you write more!! |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 7, | I like the line where he is talking to the lock. "I used to take hapkido, **." Hilarious!! I cannot wait for more, you need to update soon!! |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 6, | EVIL PEOPLE! They are all LIARS! That is mean, another great chapter, by the way. Can't wait for the next chapter. |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 5, | Excellent chapter! Can't wait to read more! |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 4, | Another excellent chapter, of course. How did the old people know his name? Or were they people? Dun, dun, dun! |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 3, | Close to the beginning of this chapter there was a typo. Instead of "font" it should be "front". Other than that, another excellent chapter! |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 2, | VERY GOOD! Just as an FYI you spelled "coodies" wrong. It is cooties. Other than that, another excellent chapter. Are you sure that you arent a professional?? |
| jerichosbabe2007 2003-08-31 ch 1, | The quote of the year is now officially "where his ** wiping paper dreams awaited him" I LOVE that line! Very very awesome so far, I love Josh. Very well written, I feel ticked off for Josh, can't wait to read more!! |
| Carolgirl00 2003-08-20 ch 5, | ooh..wow. I just read chapters 2-5. it's really creepy! I really got into the story and I'm really enjoying it a lot! I usually don't read horror stories though, so this is pretty new for me. It's kind of predicatable though, don't you think? I mean whenever you talk about the myth you always mention this one 'mysterious kid that no one knows about'. lol, or did you want it to be like that? Oh well, whatever, it's still really awesome, and I luv it! (this is one long review) -Carolyn |
| Carolgirl00 2003-07-31 ch 1, | Hey just read "the damned." Do you have another chapter or are you writing more? Well, I really like it so far. The description and talent is just flowing from it. I feel like I'm reading a professional novel. It's truly amazing how someone about the same age as me can have so much talent. I'm not just saying this, you are REALLY good! But, hey, I'm sure you know that by now! ^_~ Heh. Also, I like your humor. It's sarcastic and really casual. I feel sorry for that bastard's life yet at the same time I don't. Oh well, is something horrible gonna happen to him? Oh the suspense! Well, that's about it for now. Keep writing and I'll get around to reviewing your other peices, too! Good luck! |