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| Squirly159 2003-07-30 ch 1, | That's awesome! Hope to see more of your work! |
| Wrong Name Tag 2003-07-30 ch 1, | Nicely written and a good meaning to it. However, maybe try to get your point out in a less-literal way. Maybe just have her step back. Or, maybe give it a new title. (Meh, I'm not trying to be overly-critical; honest. I'm just trying to give suggestions to make this piece even more effective). Nice job, though. ~Jess |