Oh, wow. That's SO beautiful. I the slipping in and out of rhyme around the italicised section, the idea of connecting, the phrase 'losing distance', 'sniggering statistics', 'greased for gravity' - your alliteration is so natural and spontaneous, not contrvied like it s often ends up. A simple subject spawned such depth! Very impresed. And thanks for the review.
Blue skies...

Oh, I forgot to tell you that yes, the story will continue.

I love this poem. Of course, I say that all the time when I review your stuff. I love how you play with sentance structure. "Bird, this space between us, explain?" Perfect.

Hey, Lowell Boston! It's been a LONG time since I've made any contact with you! This is an interesting poem. Believe it or not, I've never read a poem outside of Shel Silverstein and those I have written for projects and stuff. I liked the beginning with the bird and all; the distance between you and the bird. I dunno why exactly, I just thought it was neat!

By the way, man, Escape has gone really far! I'm at the end of the third part of the story, well, about 20k words from the end! It's gotten me 120 reviews, Escape has! I also have come up with a fourth part which I have posted part of. Please read on man, I feel really accomplished with my work.

Later!

-Bakedo.