Wow. Gory and yet so gripping.
Your description is such that I didn't even notice I was reading it.
I especially like how, throughout the story you never had to state what the main characters were--you told it by inference and good narrative.

I like the way you write for Rat. The language is exactly as i would have expected her to think, short and simple. yet its very effective.
Want more.

*blinks* well done wolf! (and you thought this was BAD...*Raziel shakes his head and makes disapproving noises*)

Lovely build-up of suspense - and I really liked the "broken" descriptions of the attacker.

*sits back and applauds* Encore! Encore!

Very interesting...

Whoo-hoo! *bounces* I love this beginning, wolf, it has a marvellous sense of humour and really makes me empathise with Rat - damn all these baldy folk!! *growls* Write more soon!!

^_^

Hey, this is bazarre but very entertaining, and you've written it well. I hope you continue!