Meh, I can tell you wrote it a while ago. Especially after three people shrugged, right in a row, and then I realized that the dialogue was not... paragraphized... properly.

But the concept is deeply engaging, and I think if you go over this chapter (or, if you don't have time, let me do it), and pick out the little grammar mistakes and such, then repost it, you could definitely do it. ^-^

Luff yoo.

Nice! love the story! update soon plz! well ill be checking bak soon! luv lotz

~J. D. Karver