You're a great poet. Wow. The poems you wrote are deep, with great imagery. Damn... wish i could write something like that. Well, keep writing. ^_^

you have a deep reverence and understanding of the natural world. This is reflected in your poem which is marvelously crafted.

Hidi hi there my dear... heh thanks for reviewibng my poem and a double thanks for the suggestion... hm will definitely have to write another poem and use it,and abit of brushing up on metaphors wouldn't go a miss either, hey your words of wisdom could actually be turned into a poem... eight lines, okay a little poem but a poem none the less! Any how enough about my poems I'm here to talk about your fabulous poem, and what a fabulous poem it isw my dear! In fact there's so much fabulousness that I don't know where to start... I love your use of imagery, the rustry crane, man-killing slabs, pumping wing mechanics! And oh your use of adjectives is amazing too... I love the soulessness of the crane and the personal river highway! It's just such a fabulous poem, and excellently structured... yeah just an awesome poem that's great to read ^_^

Nice, but the first line "Sudden it hits you."?

Wow. You and your excellent poetry. Such excellent imagery, flowage of wordage, intelligence, deepness...:D

Thanks for writing this excellence.

Thanks for reviewing my unconventional piece of "work". Hehe. To answer your question, it's my name at the bottom. I just thought about how it would sound if I had meant it to be part of the story...I shuddered. I still am.

But anyway, good poem here. Don't ever stop writing or I'll murder your dog.

I like it. I love how you use your words and how you address mechanism verses the natural order. Nice work.
~Toiresasa