Aw...I like it. But I only have five minutes to think up a clever review, but I will say this, my nickname is Sleeper and this poem really got me interested in your deeper meaning. I'm not quite sure what that is right now but all I know is that I have the worst case of writer's block and you seem to have inspired me to write more! I am off, Little Sleeper is off to write more..and thank you for helping me.

Gaki

this is a good poem. Do you know what? I'm happy. I did a poem for Roots for my U.S. History teacher and he said he was going to put it on the board for me. ^_^. I liked it. It was five Mword pages on. OH, and to answer your question about my current fic (Slave and Master) It's nowhere near done yet. ^_^. You'll just have to see. Keep on reading. It's getting near to the point where it's going to part II. Stay on and read...Now isn't that a suspense?

Wow... To say the least, I love this poem. The fact that it rhymes is amazing, for that is no small feat to achieve with a poem this long. And so, I repeat, Wow.

"Truth is perception and choice is the key:We are the way we have chosen to be."Great poetry. I was especially struck with the wealth of meaning in these two lines.

"Stars are ever falling so keep with you a wish" There is such truth in this line why put faith in something that is already dead when you lay eyes upon it? I love the rhyme scheme in this the use of rhyming couplets too it all helps to achieve this nearly nursery rhyme sounding story and thus makes it memorable.

Rhymes are the hardest to control in poetry. Some people put so much effort into them that the whole meaning of the poem is shattered, broken. However, when rhymes are skillfully used, as is the case here, the poem lives; it has a pulse, an entrancing rhythm that makes us breathe in time with it. The mood is so intense, too. You are clearly talented.

*faint* Oh, gosh, I adore the rhyme scheme in this one. (That's what it is, isn't it? I can't remember what exactly it's called.. but I love the flow of it.. and the rhyming- oh, it was just so -good-!)

Not to mention so many verses spoke such truth.. my favorite, favorite line must have been this: [Love is ever fleeting and knowledge is a gift]. It made me grin like the big dope I am. It's quote worthy. (Unless of course, you're not a fan of inspirational quotes and such.. ^^;; I am of the really great ones.. but that's it..)

Besides, I think rhyming poems are the hardest to create, and you orchestrated this one just beautifully. It doesn't seem forced in the slightest. Again, I'm just so impressed... And so, now I'm terribly curious as to what inspires your poetry..?

Well, it's probably time I stopped gushing like a brainless twit, so I'll apologize for that. Please do forgive me. And, once again, til next time!

-Inky

Quite intesting. I like the title and the poem was definitely pretty spooky.

Thanks for the review by the way!

Another amazing poem! I think I like this one more... I'm not sure. Regardless, you write great poetry. Please continue to output more of it ^_^

This was quite good. The rhyming couplets add a sense of mysticism that it definately seems like you were going for. But unlike everyone else it seems, I wasn't creeped out by the Sleepers; they seemed to me more sad than scary. I wonder which you were going for? If you're looking to edit, you may want to change some word choices to reflect either the sadness or the scariness more, or bring them in balance if you're looking for both. Other than that, I think there was one typo (line 4, "yet no near", should maybe be "yet not near"), but it was really very good. Well done!

wow, thats really good. Another great poem. I love these lines, they spoke to me:

Life is a story without a purpose in sight,Anything can happen, yet the chances are slight.Truth is perception and choice is the key:We are the way we have chosen to be.

Brilliant. Oh and I also wanted to thank you for reviewing Behind Delicate and Honey. Makes us want to write more. Anyway! Going back to the topic at hand. I love this poem. I shall put this under my favs. :) Hope you are working on more wonderful poetry.

This is truly amazing! These sleepers are cool! If they exist in real life, what would they look like? ;)

This one is also very good. You have some amazing talent.

Oi >_< You -ARE- good, in a lack of a better term I s'pose. I love the term 'The Sleepers' that you used for them though, it really just fits with what it is you're trying to convey about them and what -they- want. I love though how it just seemed to all flow, everything that is,but also with the messages and the little pieces here and there that all just go together. 'Truth is perception and choice is the key: We are the way we have chosen to be.' I truly agree with what you say in those two lines, one of my favourites I guess ^^; But in the end, this was pretty creepy and it made me think after reading it too. Well hope all goes well, and not by will but your own thoughts, I can't wait for anything more to come. And if not, well hey I was glad enough to have read both 'Fixed Bodies' and 'The Sleepers', both more than just well done, but then I wouldn't be talking english if I tried to go farther than that. ::sheepish grin:: Oh heh never said thanks for the review...so thank ya! ^^

Whoah nice imagery. Seriously spooky - but it produced very nice pictures. Great job - and if you can please check out my stuff - most likely "Dream's Nightmare" or "Behind Kaiti Yotsu." Please do I'd love your input.