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| Anime 2004-12-01 ch 1,  | yare, yare... how can I say this? Well... although I like it... it's so sad... did your friend really dream this? unbelievable... I can almost cry. T_T like tanya-c said... there are some missing facts from these fiction... but what the heck? it was all based on a dream! I'd say... it could pass for an anime fanfic with a little more info... although I don't want to make a new one. -_-" care to describe the characters next time? |
| tanya-c 2004-01-17 ch 1,  | i don't like it... there's a rule in writing that does not encourage "rushing" (i think) you didn't even make an introduction... you didn't tell us how they lived, attitudes.. i don't even know what they're like... how can i like the characters when i don't even know what kind of persons they are inside? plus, the plot is totally useless... is caile and adrian psychic? did they know that the girl dreamed it all. plus, you cannot say that adrian died right after he was treated of cancer. 1st of all, a person with cancer undergoes therapy to see if he really IS okay... if they don't think the treatment (chemotherapy) had any complications, that's the time they let the person out... did he die of a supernatural cause? *shakes head* though i should congratulate you on your writing... not that much grammatical errors.. but there are some... you are able to write well in spite of the plot (dream) that you wrote... |