Beautiful! I love how true that was. Its just like humans. Babies are so pure and as soon as they are released to the real world - everything starts to taint them. Makes you upset doesn't it? Nice piece!

=( Beautiful. You have inspired me with this !! XD Beautiful bautiful poem. Absoloutly stunning.

~* Noelle *~

I love your writing style. It's simply beautiful.

I love all the devices you've used here, particularly the second stanza (1-2-3-4-5). This subject isn't new, but you've given it a fresh treatment, which is refreshing.

~lyv

That was fantastic! I loved the last but 2 verse. Brilliant work!

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Well.. I can't think of anything sensible to say, so I'll just say you did one heck of an amazing job on this. Incredible work, keep writing.

this is incredible... it's one of your greatest pieces yet. definitely going in my favorites.

Wow...All I can say is Wow..Sarah it is your very best..You need to get your stuff published.. Brillant...3-Thumbs-up

Excellent poem, excellent message. I really liked the way you structured the poem, as it was very effective in conveying the gradual corruption of innocence. Keep up the great work :)
*cosmo-queen*

You are so talented! Every work of yours had deeply inspired me and many others out there, don't stop writing!

This is just awesome. Excellent job, the style really made the poem feel moodier. Gives it a better atmosphere. Great, great job!

This is probably your best work ever. Very mythodical and cathartic and also very sad and moving. The structure struck me as clever as well.

very good poem, very meaningfull!

btw: what kind of HP shipper are you?

Stray

It reminds me of Blake's peom, The Lamb. Very good comparison. The peom is very smooth, a pleasure to read. ^^
Sorry if my review seems weird, my mind is a bit off today.

Wow...amazing. I like how you use the lamb as a comparison to a human child. Makes me think of the days when I was innocent *sly grin*

Sorry I'm not logged in, I don't have time, but excellent work anyways!