O it just keeps getting better. I'm curious as to this king mortemor. He doesn't seem too incredibly kind to me. Although perhaps I'm just paranoid. Good stuff!
~Khlern

Wow. I really got into this one ^_^; It's so dramatic! Tons of emotion here. On to the second chapter!

Wow two chapters. :) Very interesting! I can't wait 2 see what you come up with next and I hope you didn't take any offence with my coment about ur summery it was only a suggestion, nothing more. As always I'm looking forward to your next chapters.

wan! cool chapter. I'm very amused by mary, she's funny. and I like the flashbacks with K, you're gonna do more of those in the future ne? and tell us about jerus too? for what ever reason he interests me. well get the next chapter out soon ne? love it! ^.~

XD Mary! >.> You are very evil telling me you have good ideas and not sharing. There for I really would like you to get going and working on the next chapter despite the fact you got this one out remarcably quick. Nice chapter, I'll wait for the next and Loki in a jar will be stuck in my mind for a bit.

You know I love this story just like all your unfinished ones. Only this one better not be put on a side burner! ^_^ I'm looking forward and will pester for the next chapter.

I disagree. The intro sets up the story very well, and I hope you'll keep it.
I liked this story alot. The characters felt quite real, and were effective at imersing you in the atmosphere of the story. I hope this quality isn't lost throughout future chapters.
The story itself is very interesting too. Please write more!

Well Lucifer you seem 2 have an interesting story here. Your summery was a bit confusing and perhaps made some readers avoid it- you might want to try and change it a bit to make more since. But beside that good story. I'll be looking forward to seeing your next chapter soon.

oh cool. I really like this one. get more out asap ne? love it!