I like the circular theme in this one. It's easy to read and thought provoking, and the rhythm is simply lovely.

I loved this. And how do we get WOW reviews to you now you've changed site?

Thanks for the review ^.^ I took in what you said and reread the story and thought "Gee, I can see what they mean..." So I redid it. I don't know if it came up as a new chapter or something, but I went into a bit of detail about the hatching and such ^^ (Of course you must forgive me, it's 3 in the morning and I am now just working on it) *grins* Anyway, now for the reason I'm writing this ^o^ I don't usually go for the poetry and such, but I thought to check this out. Congrats! This is wonderful ^.^ I must say, I do love your style of writing. This would make a good song, you'd just need to find the right rhythm... Anyway, I hope you write more poetry. And I've also put that little lullaby up separately, so if you want to check it out. Though it's really, really, really short ^.^ More work on FP, that's all it counts for *laughs* Anyway, see ya on the next update!!

Holy ... yeah. Wow. I'm not generally a fan of poetry (and I'm not incredibly familiar with TS Eliot), so I don't know how useful my critique can be, but ... that was just amazing. So much depth, I could read it quite a few times before I figured out the full meaning of it. I especially loved the lines - "Starting a chain of events where immortality / Will be the curse of time and mortality" ... not sure why, it just struck a chord in me somewhere.
The only thing that bothered me (which, believe me, is a tiny thing) was the use of "razor-sharp", which sounds a bit cliche to my ears. But all the rest of your imagery is so original - that's probably the only reason why it stood out. Incredible job - you should post poetry more often! ;)
- Skyra

very nice

Wow... lol... that was some great writing. You're so good. ^_^ Anyways, I'll be catching up on your story when I get more time...lol ... Wonderful job!

That was one powerful poem. The imagery was vivid and unusual, something that was a pleasant surprise.

*Quickly now, quickly! Over, under, above!*

I loved that line. Although it cosists of just a few words, it encloses the essence of flight. Excellent.

And I definitely loved the last line, although I believe that a circle has no ends.

Man. You even write great poetry. This was good. I love it.

Sheesh, Kez. Incredible. Makes me want to close shop and go home. In a good, impressed way, that is, of course.
*raises fist of jealousy and squashes you*
Until Our Paths Under the Pen Converge Another Time I Remain
Diviner

Wow! This is extremely well-done. Great word choice and very nice syntax. Overall, I have to say one of the best poems I've read in a while.

Hmm...personification of wind. Does this have anything to do with 'The War of the Winds'? It sounds like it does. Very nice.
^_^

And I know I haven't updated much, I blame writer's block, plot bunnies, and school. But I still have been writing, just not for the stuff here...[it's on Fanfiction.net ^^;]

I like the mental images that come with this, good job.

Ice

Wow! I def agree with such good reviews on this. This is def. bardic, like your telling a tell or even singing it out! Such great talent you have. I really liked this poem.

Ineptitude of nonchalance? I love it.

Although I don't get "When Dante's Heaven meets Lucifer's Hell" - unless the morningstar's published a discription of Hell without me knowing- it gets a bit confusing, as the Divine Comedy both describes Heaven and Hell.

Little side note, it was sp dissapointing that the worst punishment they have for you in hell is to be trapped in a block of ice. I wonder if the demons play hockey on their off days...

But I digress.

Lovely poem, gives for an epic feel of things, such as a bard song one might hear in a fantasy tavern.


Rai Kamishiro

Cool poem, i can't say i've read a lot of T.S Eliot, but i have a TON of qoutes by him. I really liked the whole style of this poem and i quite like it. Nice job, Kezkay.

--Belle