cool. I want to read more, but it's getting late.

I ADORE the metaphor you gave here. The final stanza was haunting and made me think. Your poems are so dark and... I can't find the words to describe them. Just know that I think you write amazingly well.

incredible work!

Wow, very deep and dark..I love it!

Good, very good. You have an interesting outlook on things. Your use of imagery and possibly metaphors is good.

That was hauntingly beautiful...I like.

This was really amazing.


~Heart of the Sword

Makes me think of the Disturbed song The Game. Its a really good poem because it sort of plays with you. It lets you know only things which it has already told you and leads you in a circle. Very good analogy. It might just be me though...

- Crucified Sanctity -

You're amazing. No one can quite capture the spontaneous, calm, thoughtful energy like you do in your writing. Every word fits in instantly, yet has obviously been well thought over and polished. Well done !
ELise

i felt that u had a really well written poem here so i m reviewing to tell u that. i think u have the all the makings of a really good writer. please r+r my stuff if u want. i suggest "be where i wanna be", "hurt" and "this one is called f* you." keep up the good writing because i would love to read more.
peace
>recalcitrant

Love that second stanza.. amazing. Incredible poem, I really like it.

Keep writing.