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Post 2003-08-11 . chapter 1
I guess the nature of this poem is for anyone's guess.
I know it means a lot to you, and perhaps only you
can describe it in detail.

I imagine it describes either a physical condition
being dealt with as a side effect of being alive, or
an emotional state that is caused by perserverence.

One line I like is:

"My chest falling
Into
My stomach where
It pools "

It's such awesome imagery. I'm envious. ^_^
Molotov 2003-08-10 . chapter 1
I liked the rhyme of this, although it gets kinda screwy towards the end.

I honestly don't know what this is about, if it's something more than the obvious - the pain and suffering that goes along with living your life.

Good stuff, as always.
You're much better than me, but I still love you, even if I'm full of embroiled jealously.
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