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Angel Charlotte Rush 2008-01-01 ch 13,	abuseI really like it you should keep it up! ~Jade~
darkangle69 2007-06-06 ch 13,	abusehey i really like it. i think its got great potental!! keep up the good work!
ur just you 2006-02-05 ch 13,	abusedance off woot woot lol, please update! i read Rylee? is taht how you spell it? it was good. and i really like this one. so can you please please update? thx! :)
codyismypup 2005-02-03 ch 10,	abuseYAY! more chapters!
codyismypup 2005-02-03 ch 6,	abusePLEASE continue with the story! I'm rooting for ya!
Iqisiazsi 2004-10-17 ch 4,	abuseI can tell you like this kind of story :P So do I. This one is better than Rylee is, I think, though I've only had time to read through chapter 4. I'll try making this review shorter as I need to do some homework and go to bed soon. This story seems to be better paced, but I can't really say much since I've only read a small part of it. What I did notice was a few typing errors. In chapter one for example: "the fifth button was made the fifth button was made" Things like that can detract the reader from the story. A little proofreading would really add to it. Also somewhere it said "**" instead of "as" Just little things like that. It might help to double space the story and instead of simply reading over it, open a second wordprocessor and retype it. I find that really helps me to notice errors because it adds another level of thinking and awareness to the process. Also, and I know this probably has to do with FictionPress more than you, but the layout on chapters two and four make it harder to read because it's so bulky. If you could figure out how to change that it would be a lot easier to read. I guess that wasn't short after all...I'm bad at short reviews.
Drac-frst 2004-08-07 ch 13,	abuseWait... so does she really like cedric? or is she still just doing this 'cus he's her master? That's really all she uses as an excuse when the other guys flirt with her.
Wolf-Demon-Lord 2004-07-07 ch 13,	abuseyour stories are good all of them are but you need an editor so if you need me to be an editor just e-mail me luvmuffin20022003@yahoo.com i woul be willing to help any way possible another thing you got a slave fetish? laughs just jokin man seriously e-mail if you need an editor or a bta reader you little typos were aggravating eventhough i knew what you meant but some people might not know what you mean
Melody1 2004-07-04 ch 13,	abuseHey this is a cool story. I don't see many about slaves and masters these days. But just out of curiosity...what kind of world is this? I mean...it seems pretty modern, similar to ours, in everything except for the serf/slave part. And it's very accepted. I was just curious. Um...it's original. I appreciate original. Initially I kinda liked Cedric, but I don't really. Somehow...she should get with Tyson. I like your names by the way. Tyson is a super nice guy. Cedric has some jealousy issues and although he claims to want her to be willing and all...it took him like no time to get...close to her. Not that Tyson didn't ask for a kiss...lol. I just like Tyson more. ~Mel~
Queen of Laughs 2004-06-27 ch 13,	abusecant wait for more! update asap!!
Jackie Paper 2004-06-24 ch 13,	abusethis was a fine chapter, and shes gotten enough guts to show off her stuff. maybe they need to have a bit more communication though, ya know, decide what each of them likes and doesnt like. jsut a thought, itd probably clear everything up.
stained innocence13 2004-06-24 ch 13,	abuseoh! loved d dance off! u show her! lol, protective cedric. hehehe. more soon! :D
Peg Pannery 2004-06-23 ch 13, anon.	abuseI really liked this chapter. Reminds me of two girls had my dance studio, lol.
DancinDramaFreak 2004-06-23 ch 13,	abuseThat was most definitely NOT a lame chapter. You captured it beautfiully; I could actually see it in my mind. Great job! Chelsea
JY 2004-06-05 ch 12, anon.	abuseI really like this plot idea. It's so cool! Haha! I love the innocent girl feel to Sasha. As for ideas, I think Cedric should have some kind of big secret and slowly it gets uncovered. Maybe a bit of jealousy and confusion, like maybe Sasha falls in love with Tyson and Cedric. hmm. Anyways, keep updating and hope you win in track =)

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