-Plain & simple: Very good... I liked it much.
-The particular line was one that stood out to me most:
"And the blood that flows from your mouth to mine."
-Was attracted to it for some reason.. Good job again.

actually while i read this the idea of romeo and juliet came up for me! but then again, i am crazy! i think it was these lines that triggered it!
And all the world was screaming at me
"All you've to do is stay away".

anyway, i loved this poem, the descripions are marvellous! great job.

See, I knew there was a reason for me to come back and read more by you. This is one hell of a poem.
The way I see it, it's about something everybody feels every now and then: it's about wanting something or someone desperately: you know it's wrong, but at the same time it feels so incredibly right.

This was really quite good.I really liked the pattern in it.

Really good. Awesome. I like the line 'Waltzing to songs of greed and lust.'

And don't worry, about your profile page... ellipses are wonderful... don't let anyone tell you they aren't! I love my ellipses... do you? Hahaha...ha.

Well for starters I was reccommended by ZealWarrior from his bio and I thought I had to come and read.

Since I don't like falmes,I doubt any author does, I won't flame you, well there's that and there's really nothing to not like about this.

The way you've definitley separated love and lust in this is very nice. You very nicely described human instincts, stupid as some of them are. And the way you explained the remorse, if you would call it that, is very vague yet very understanding. Confusing, my words are I know, sometimes I dont' even understand them but this time I do.

For being such a vague and free poem to the mind, it makes quite a lot of sense and has quite a bit of meaning to it.

See, I told I wouldn't flame, I'm not as cruel as some people are one this site. *sigh* Anyway...Thanks to ZealWarrior for reccommending me to you.

I really did like this, no lies...ciao!

Good Reccommendation Zeal...
Love always,
A-Light-From-Your-Darkness.

Wow...this was something that I found to be quite refreshing to read. In my opinion, it was quite bold of you to tackle the subject of simple human carnality. It seems to me that the entire poem was about the lusts that all people have and the sway that they possess. I can also see it as meaning beneath the inhibitions and thought processes of man, humans are still animals, and as animals humans occassionally abandon all reason and thought for simple desires and motivations (ex. survival, sex, dominance etc.) despite the fall out that may occur afterwards.

Powerful. Intense. Deep. Dark and exotic. Did I say powerful? Because these words are, most definitely. This is one of 'those' poems that never cease to evoke a reaction from me. I have many interpretations, but I cannot name one. It is less the narrative that carries me away, but the quality of the language itself, the actual words.

One interpretation: Despite everything, despite modern society's gloss of sophistication, we are still primal, tactile creatures.

OR, sex is a form of violence and dominance in itself.

Quite grim, yet beautiful at the same time. Well I certainly can't dechiper it but it was very interesting. Some very nice imagery and pleasent rhymes. The structure is nice and simple and the word choice is really fitting. As for what I think it's about, well this is total croc but I think it's about a girl who meets a guy, falls in love, and he perhaps betrays her at the end. Though I'm really terrible at interpreting poetry. But this was really great! Keep up the good work.