This song flowed really well! And the best part is, I know exactly how you feel. And the lyrics are actually connected and make sense and form a STORY. Unlike most songs these days.

Wah! I want to hear it sung!

Hey, I decided to review this song, too!
*SIGH* this is so sad, and its worse because I know EXACTLY how you feel. I think everyone has un-reciprocated love (I have too much!) but its worse when its a person whos been your friend.

Yeah, that's pretty much how I feel sometimes - you did a great job of putting the feeling into words. Some of the reviewers have asked you to take "damn" out - don't do that. I counted the syllables in the last stanza (not the chorus, but the one before it), and the two lines match up, so if you take "damn" out, it would disrupt the rhythm of the song.

I'm sure I've felt like this a few times. You did a wonderful job of having some sort of uncertainty and a subtle loneliness in the narrator's voice. Nice...

I'm deffenatly likin' this. So very... The way I feel sometimes...
Why do I wait for you?
Damn I know that the dream isn't coming true
You can't help what you do
I simply can't blame that you're not coming through
That doesn't flow as much as it should. The second line has one to many sylibles or something... I'd sugest trying it without the "damn" in it. I just flows better me thinks.

Hey hey. (S'me, Dukky in disguise) Nice one! One of those things that really makes you feel better about your life! Just kiddin'. Anyways, I thought it was excellent. Update Mortal of the lamp, already!. And, the person who signed a review before said all that stuff about damn. They must not've read the song but just looked for something to nitpick at. Damn sounds right where it is. SOunds like you wanted it so much it frustrated you when you didn't get it. Right? Anyways, really written from the heart. Start putting u more poetry/songs like this. [Truth Is Like A Tragedy]

I like this, especially the chorus. Well-written. But the "damn" doesn't belong in this poem. It jars. There's a time and a place for cussing, and this isn't it. Sad and beautiful and your heart's breaking and then - damn. You know? Distinct lack of flowage. If you're going to use cussing in a poem like this you need to be angrier, more bitter. "Hell has no fury ...?" - Kishana

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Oh my gosh!
This is some good stuff Dreamer!
You have some awesome rhymes in this and the chorus again seems to wrap things up nicely.
-Eckrice

Very nice, I can totally identify with that and it's really well written. I like the imagery of "My tears follow the rain, joined together they streak down the windowpane." Give the idea of awaiting something that'll never come, but damned to waiting never the less.

Thanks for the really nice review on "Lights Fade Away". And it means a lot that anyone continously reads the jargon that I pass off as literature. Keep writing,

Malice

Firstly, thanks for you review

And wow, this is REaLLY beautiful, who were really insipred while writing this, weren't you?

i adored this *worships you*

This is so well written. This song is an amazing piece of work, written out of personal experience and also something everyone an relate to. I know I've been there before (to be totally honest, that's where I'm standing now) and I can't tell you how much I love your words in this piece. This is a job truly amazingly done.

i think this is a cool song. very touching. im not gonna use it for my band. but good job.