Wince. I know what you're talking about- but I'm in a different point of view. Anyhow, that's another story...

Nice poem. Really nice. It flowed well, made sense- good job.

Thanks for reviewing 'For Zach'. Yeah, the formatting was weird, but that was how it came out. Read some of my other poems, they usually have more than one word per line!

i kno how it feels 2 lose a best friend, i kno all too well. anyways, i thouht this was pretty good maybe cuz i can relate 2 it.

Hay great poem. Some people are like that. Just turn on you out of no where. It really sucks though when you bestfriend does it i bet though. My Best friend hasn't done that to me yet. But really good friends have.

*starts attempting to dry eyes* Reading this after falling out with an ex-ex-ex-best mate (if you can unravel that... my ex-best mate, but i made up, and now shes an ex-best mate again)...

I understand how you feel... well, no ** sherlock.. I feel like that.

~Nicci~
xoxox

Very aptly-titled...hate is everywhere in here. God one.

~Flamewing

wow, this is great! i really like this... thankx for ur nice words, i've been through something a lot like this poem.

I like your poem a lot. Even if it makes me sad. ::smile:: I hate misunderstandings between friends, but I hope somehow the hate between you and your X friend will fade. not that i know anything of your situation, I just really understand and like the poem. You're very talented. I hope you continue to write, so I can continue to read.

i liked it it was a story poem kind of like most of mine it was very good

Oh. My. Gosh. I can relate to this. hating an ex 'best friend' with a passion.. Mine totally ruined my life. Now, because of her, life just isn't the same. *sigh* I think I'll more of your stuff, because I relate so strongly to this one. BTW, the poem was great... It was quite vivid, and a picture was painted in my mind.

ha! kool poem, i hate it when frnds blame u for doing somethin when they did done worse, blah blah blah...i really liked the ending...*two thumbs up*

Good poem.. I cnat relaly realte vcuz im the kinda person that cant hate anyone but ive been in that situation before

this is a wicked poem, i know how u feel also lost a gd m8 and like 2 think that i don't care.i agree wiv this bit 'You say I've hurt you,
But hey, what about me?' its reli gd

chrz 4 the review, feel free 2 review sum more!
Born confused

The Bad-

Line four: Change "You're" to "Your"
Line nine: If you change "can't" to "cannot" and "hatred" to "hate", the words give stronger meaning to the piece as a whole, while still keeping the same number of syllables.
Actually, if you did away with most of your contractions (not all, though: "didn't" could still work), I believe that your piece will ring a lot louder and more confident. Contractions make it sound like you want to rushRushRUSH through the piece, and if you are trying to deliver this kind of a message in the second person, you doh't want to rush. You want that second person to fully feel just what you are going through (and, your readers, of course)

The Good-
Strong piece overall. I realize it was probably just lethargic, but it wasn't bad at all.